I couldn't quite read his expression, is wasn't angry.  (is should be it)

Kevin crept into the room slowing taking everything in (slowing should be slowly)

We spent the next few hours just talking. I can't say I wasn't a bit miffed that he'd know what Robert was (know should be known. Also change he'd to he had)

(The world should be a better place and people should be nicer. And there should be lemon drop rivers and candy mountains and I'm getting distracted)

You forgot to mention how before they started talking, Levi put on some Linkin Park. Crawling in his skin. These wounds they will not heal.  If nothing else, this chapter once again proves that Marshal is boss. Also shouldn't Dani be a better fighter by now? This makes her seem like she's still an amateur. Being angry can only explain so much.

Overall I like how these chapters are. They seem more like a flow of events than your earlier works, which were more of a collection of short stories. The writings good and the overall story is interesting. Can't wait to see what happens next.